'Murica! It's time to Vote!

 I've written two blurbs for my rough-drafted novel The Tornado Catcher. I will pursue traditional publishing with this one, rather than going the indie route. BUT, to get an agent interested, one needs to pique said agent's interest in taking on one's project with a catchy 30-second pitch. At least, that's what everything I've learned over the past year from writers who have landed agents tells me. 

To make voting at least a little amusing, I'm going to attach a picture to each blurb, so if you just want to read and comment 'tornado' or 'noodlers' to cast a vote, you can do that.

Without further ado, here's two different pieces for the same story:

A - 

Upon rejection for tenure, associate professor Freddo Mancha suffers a minor mental breakdown and puts in writing to the tenure committee that he can use 5G cell phone towers to pull the energy out of rotating thunderstorms. Instead of saving his seat in academia, his claims draw the interest of business and government, each with their own agenda for Mancha’s program. But storm season is a semester away, and his program isn’t going to install itself in every cell tower in the state of Oklahoma. With the help of  local deputy Stanislav Stangle, who’s intrigued with possible riches to be pulled out of thin air, Mancha must keep his program secure, while dealing with the Provost of a university that has no use for him other than the grant money his project brings in.

B - 

University of Oklahoma associate professor Freddo Mancha takes his tenure rejection as well as catfish pulled out of a riverbank by hand. While the committee doesn’t see much merit to his proposal to pull electricity out of thunderstorms, but private interests that shovel money at the Provost of the university do. Instead of firing Mancha, the Provost, the NSA and the private interests look the other way, in hopes of getting ahold of his program before it can go line. Assisted by down-on-his-luck deputy Stanislav Stangle, Mancha travels the state installing the program in every 5G tower from Ardmore to Zena. When Chad Callahan, the NSA agent tasked with tracking Mancha, decides the professor’s project has become a threat to the 400,000 people of Oklahoma’s second largest city, it sets up an electric confrontation in the shadow of a monster storm.

Let me know in the comments which pitch gets you more interested in the antics of Freddo Mancha.